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October 2, 2010

Waiting Room




This post has been published by me as a part of the Blog-a-Ton 15; the fifteenth edition of the online marathon of Bloggers; where we decide and we write. To be part of the next edition, visit and start following Blog-a-Ton.


“Yes Sir, we covered the full story. The tape and the pictures are with Gaurav. He left already with the team. This story will create sensation Sir.” Barkha said to her boss on phone. She used to work for a big news channel. She came to this small village Chandanpur, to cover a gang rape case. In past also there were quite a few similar incidents happened in this area, but justice never reached the victim. More over Barkha’s channel head wanted some sensational and exclusive story this time, which was why they got ready to fund this story. Barkha was comparatively a new comer in the media field. This story was supposed to be a turning point for her career. 

They filmed the story as per their plan and the whole team was ready to return back to city that day. However at last moment they found one witness, who wanted to meet Barkha in person.  On other side Barkha’s boss wanted to review the first cut story on the same day itself. So she decided to stay back, while rest of the team started early morning for the city. She met that witness and collected all the relevant information. After which as planned, she started for the railway station to board the train to city.

 Chandanpur railway station was an old and small station. She enquired about her train to the station master and came to know that the train was 6 hours late. Then she had no choice but to wait for the train in the railway station. There were some wooden benches in the station, she sat on one of them. She looked around, there was lot of greenery around that place but the station looked barren. Very few train used to stop there, so the station used to be empty most of the time. In no time sky was covered with dark clouds, the whole atmosphere gave a haunted look to the station. In few minutes it started to rain and she ran for shelter towards the tiny waiting room. 




That was a small room with two wooden benches placed next to each other. An earthen pot for drinking water was kept in one corner. Only one bulb was there, which was barely lightening the room. She kept her bag next to her and sat on the bench. She was not very comfortable but her tired body left her no choice but to sit there. She took out a book from her handbag to kill some time. 

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“Can I sit here?” she found a tall manly figure standing in front of her. She moved her bag to one side and went back to her book. Barkha was busy reading but something was not right. She felt that this man is staring at her. She turned her head towards him but he still continued staring nonstop. This was making her uncomfortable. “Excuse me? You have any problem?” She asked him furiously. She did not bother for his answer, “Idiot, stupid, fool. As if he never saw a girl before” she said to herself and slightly moved towards the other side of the bench. 

“Where are you going?” He was trying to start a conversation. 

“Why can’t he sit peacefully” she thought. 

“Looks like you are all alone? By the way, this is not a safe place for girls to travel alone.” He again.
She wanted to maintain calm but his questions were annoying her. “Yes I am alone. And there is no need for you to take care of me, I can take care of myself very well” She took her bags and moved to the next bench. She turned her face to the other side and acted as if she is busy reading the book. 

By now it was evening, it was getting dark outside. And to add to her trouble, power went off. She got really scared in the dark room. 

Nothing was visible clearly, and suddenly she felt someone’s touch on her shoulder. It freaked her out, she shouted and ran towards the door. She ran out, it was dark there and was raining too. She kept on running. Fear in her made her run faster and faster. She was tired, exhausted. She didn’t even realize that she came very far away from the station. There was no one around and it was very dark. Before she can understand where she was, someone covered her mouth from back.

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She screamed and woke up. She was sweating and was breathing heavily. It took her few minutes to realize that she was still in that waiting room. There was no one around other than her, and all that she saw was a dream. “Thank god that was just a dream” she looked for her water bottle, but it was empty. She was very thirsty and had no option but to drink water from the pot kept in the corner of the room. She drank water and looked at her watch. “Still 3 hour to go. It’s so boring!” She came back to her place and leaned on the wall behind. She was worrying about how to pass these three hours, when she heard him. “Can I sit here?”


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38 comments:

Uday said...

Very nice presentation of plot, Embedded Picture made station alive in mind ....

Very Good!!!!

OP said...

good story !!

RaNiiiiii said...

wow Sweta.. loved ur story again.. good narration !!

Vikram Karve said...

excellent story.
enjoyed reading it.

Sweta said...

@Uday: Thank you :)

@Op: Thanks OP ji :)

@Rani: Thanks :)

@Vikram: Thanks you :)

Amity said...

this is too good to be true...i love your storyline...:)

ATB! :)

Kumar Bibek said...

Can I sit here? Hope this doesn't happen with you some day.

Nice read.

Obsessivemom said...

I love tales with a twist.. yours was perfect.

Sweta said...

@Amity: thanks for the wishes :)

@Kumar bibek: It did not happen to me yet... thank god :)

@Obsessivemom: Thanks :)

Maddie said...

Deja Vu! Nice :)

Aparna said...

Hi swetha!

vivid description as the plot unfolded...could imagine scene-by-scene

i experienced many such deja-vus where my mind had already pre-warned about a forthcoming situation....

stange but it happens

really great getting to know you in blogger's meet! keep in touch!

sawan said...

intriguing!

Md. Muddassir Shah said...

As always.
that s a nice one.
Good luck with the contest.

P.s: It was nice to meet you at the indimeet yesterday.

Visit my blog sometime when you are free

Aneesh said...

Good narration girl......!!
The image attached increases the reference in the story..

Good work in all...

Sweta said...

@Maddie :Thanks :)

@Aparna: I too felt nice meeting you. Thnaks for your comments :)

@Sawan: Thanks :)

@Aneesh: thank you :)

The Fool said...

Nice narrative.

Reshma said...

A very gripping narration, nicely woven around the desolate looking station.

Arpana said...

good plot as well we narration!

Jil said...

Very Interesting story...
coooooooool keeep up.. :)
"Can i Sit Here?"
;-)

Abhishek said...

Well a good one .. took me 2 readings to complete it... but was worth it. Nice dark setting.

Looking forward to more

Abhishek++

Shanmuga Sundaram Sivaraman said...

nice one yaar :)

Shrikant said...

Great plot.. excellent narration.. Loved it!! Good luck with BAT

Cherry Blossom said...

Spontaneous narration is what makes the story so thrilling and enjoyable to read. Every event occurred at a quick pace and the conclusion was brilliant. All the best.

Shivraj said...

Nice to meet u @ indibloggers meet.

Gripping !:)

Sweta said...

@The Fool: Thanks :)

@Reshma: Thanks dear :)

@Arpana: Thank you :)

@Jil: "No you can't sit here." :P

@Abhishek: thanks :) Keep visiting

@Shivaraman: Thank you :)

@Shivraj: Same here :)

Brijender Singh said...

Loved the ending !!
The terror and paranoia that seems to be taking a grip all through the post find even more potency in the unsaid anticipation of the last utterance !
Brilliant writing !

Sweta said...

@Shrikant: thanks :)

@Cherry Blossom: Thanks :) and same to you :)

@Brijender Singh:Thank you :)

Someone Is Special said...

Nice presentation.. I loved your story..
Wishing you good luck for BAT..


--Someone Is Special--

Ruchira said...

great narration ! made everything come alive !

Vaish said...

Very nice presentation of your perspective. And your plot fits in well for the picture! All the best!!

Pratibha The Talent said...

I like the twist and turns in waiting room.very well written story and all the best for the contest

Sidra Sayeed said...

Definitely enjoyed the ending. Kept me glued throughout!

Alka Gurha said...

Hi, Beautiful story....

Abha Midha said...

Hi Sweta... this is my first post or urs that i have read. A very interesting read. Look forward to reading more of your posts

Blue Lotus said...

ohhh...Gave me chills...

Sweta said...

Thanks for liking it ppl :)

atlasshrugged said...

It is really a nice story. Once started, i glued like anything and increased my speed of reading. That happens, when the stuff is exceptionally thrilling.

Keep up the good work.

Dhiraj_nttf said...

hi, sobha dey ki naukri khatre me hai.

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